I had one of my ‘Eureka’ moments Sunday night, which resulted in me going all the way back to Chapter One to add a new scene. This new scene will set off significant changes throughout the book which I now have to add/edit along. At the pace I’m going it’s gonna take an eternity before I have a polished draft.
Still, my new Dec 31st deadline to whip up the first draft stays. For now.
So, yes, the snippet.
*snipped*
Chai and Chapters 
Thanks for the happy birthday hun!As daylight receeded and the stars leapt out of their hideouts, the forests on the hillocks painted a pretty picture in their obscurity. Like the sort of place you'd want to escape to. Someplace you'd like to make your haven.Ugh, something about that makes me feel…I don't know, just makes me feel. It's like I'm really there in one of those weird moments that makes you go, whoa, I'm alive.And I love the symbolism of the crow. Is it going to be a death omen like usual, or is it just me running away with the idea?
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beautiful imagery and I am fascinated by the conversation!
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Without giving too much away, Liz, death is interwined with this story. Woohoo, I made you feel!*grins*Thanks Vero!
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Definitely a teaser!! I loved the imagery in the beginning as well. 🙂
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I really like this snippet. These lines totally stood out for me: \”When your life is a prison, you have to make do with the little you have.\” & \”Safer from the risk of revealing our identity\” –Lexie rolled her eyes –\”or simply giving away too much, whichever comes first.\” Nice job!
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I like their dynamic. \”I'm not going to get pleasant if that's what you're hoping.\” \”Don't worry. I'm not letting my imagination run wild.\”Great stuff.
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I really liked the dialog in this scene.
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Very intriguing!I am hooked by your two characters.
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Secret identities can make for exciting reading! This was well written and I hope to read more and learn more about your book.
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Lovely teaser. I enjoyed the dialogue!
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I love the dialogue between your two characters and the first paragraph is beautifully written.Great tease ^_^
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Nice! I love real voices and stories, and you fit into that category PERFECTLY. Love this!
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very hooky! I also found the interaction/dialogue between your characters intriguing! I can tell this one's gonna be dark–my favorite! 🙂
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I love the first paragraph! GREAT snip! And I agree with hound that it's \”very hooky\” I find the story intriguing and your imagery is great!
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Thank you guys! You know how to make someone feel good :))
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