First, purple hair and mint icecream are awesome! Now I want icecream.I love the voice in this and the description is very vivid. While I am not a fan of sand, I could feel it between my toes when the MC walked to the shack.I'm curious to know what's going on.
I did comment, but for some reason I think maybe my comment got lost somehow. Your teaser is amazing. Your MC's voice is very touching. Man, can't wait to read more
Chai and Chapters 
wow this is really powerful. it makes wonder what happened last summer and what's going on in this scene (and the current summer).awesome job!
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Really nice tease. I especially liked the line \”Small minty gasps\”. Beautiful!
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you paint very vivid scenes 🙂
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OMG This is gorgeous. <33 Very emotional.
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First, purple hair and mint icecream are awesome! Now I want icecream.I love the voice in this and the description is very vivid. While I am not a fan of sand, I could feel it between my toes when the MC walked to the shack.I'm curious to know what's going on.
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I did comment, but for some reason I think maybe my comment got lost somehow. Your teaser is amazing. Your MC's voice is very touching. Man, can't wait to read more
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Awesome voice. So did she pick up some random ice cream on the beach? Kinda gross.
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oh, bee.that was powerful.that was so real.beautiful!
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Great tease! I had my hair dyed stealthy like that when I was in high school =)
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Gahhhh soooo good! 🙂 Keep up the good work, it totally sucked me in!
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Wow this is really great! I love how you portray your character and the images of the beach are just awesome! This is a really great tease. 🙂
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So emotional, and the voice is so addicting. I love this!
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I love how you describe everything, visually and by scent, throughout the scene.
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This is gorgeous. The first paragraph one me over. It was so sensory.
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That was supposed to say WON me over. I'm not that big of a moron (usually)
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This is so beautiful! I love it!
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Love the details and emotion!
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Oooo, I want mooore! I like that you included more senses than just visuals, you can almost feel the sand 🙂
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You write so so so beautifully.
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This was really lovely, Bee! Great imagery.
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I loved this image \”I push my feet into the sand, loving how the little grains snake around my toes, then fall out of the gaps.\” Nicely done!
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